Sunday, November 6, 2011

Beginning of my story - good and how can I make it better (will send the rest to anyone who wants it)?

This is a very nice start. It sounds as if the character is writing in a diary, sorta like Anne Frank? Anyway, this start clearly gives an aura of a good mind, and I would like to read the whole story. Anyway, the punctuations are on the right places, and I can really feel the characters feelings. Kudos!

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